Just one comment. On the book as a whole so far. I do have a feel for the characters from their dialogue. But I am not getting a picture in my mind's eye of them. This is most unusual for me. Did you describe their physical appearance? I've not got time to go back and check at the moment. I know Ian has sandy curly hair (I think that's what I remember, although it's a common Celtic attribute and I might be assuming, I don't think so. I'm sure you mentioned that.) I don't picture Kathryn at all, is she dark, is she tall? Is it just me forgetting the description of each of them?
Uh, um, uh . . . (crickets chirp)
After tossing this around for a bit I wrote back:
About the descriptions of Ian and Kathryn, I have and haven't done a paragraph or two describing them completely. Ian is definitely described more--he has sandy brown hair, a bit of acne scars on his cheeks, a crooked nose, and is 6 feet. In the first chapter I did a bit of description about how he was dressed and his shoulders, but to be honest it doesn't come naturally to me in terms of writing.
Kathryn? She's about five foot five inches, a small to medium build, and has brown hair. That's as far as I've gotten on her. She just is.
Can you help me out? Do you have a mental image of the characters? Do you need one? Do you really, really want one? What do you think Kathryn looks like?